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Writerly Ways
Sep. 22nd, 2013 04:01 pmSince I'm busy accomplishing nothing at all but being a slug, I thought I better come do this and deal with something tough. The ever-feared 'show not tell.' I've learned one thing: people will accuse you of doing this even if you aren't. I've read books and have reviewed them on GR and other places and see that accusation. I just read the book and no, no the author didn't.
That said, I DO do it. I know that. I struggle very much with it. Part of it, I believe has to do with my turning away from description (and all seriousness I can point to the person in a writer's group in the 90's that had a lot to do with it). But even then I'm sure I did this a lot. I also write fast, thinking less about the words than I should which leaves me with deep edits that I need to make but drag my heels about.
Speaking of which, here a scene about fear. He was so afraid of going to jail his feet barely worked. Telling, no doubt.
Here's a scene about the same thing from D.B. Jackson's Thieves' Quarry I thought it worked very well. And yes as he neared the prison, memories of that old cell and his captivity in Barbados flooded his mind like a rising storm tide. War ha never frightened him, even in his youth. He had sailed through ocean storms that would have reduced some grown men to sobbing babes. He had been beaten and threatened; he had come close to dying more times than he could count. None of that scared him. But prison...He found himself choking back tears. His legs trembled as the regulars lead him down the length of Queen Street....Sweat, urine, feces, vomit, fear, desperation, hopelessness. He was drowning in a noisome sea. The men holding him practically had to carry him along the stone corridor, his feet half walking, half dragging. the soldiers' fingers were like iron, gouging the muscles in his arm.
This paints a picture of a man in terror. I could feel Ethan's fear along with him. This is the kind of scene I would like to be able to write and I think that's half the trick. There is a reason Stephen King and other authors all list reading in their top 10 things an author must do. Read. Find styles that speak to you. Try to bring some of that into your own writing.
For me, I'm not sure I will ever slow down and get something like this on the first try but to be fair, I have no idea how many rewrites it took Dr. Jackson to get it like this (D.B. Jackson has a ph.D. in history and his Ethan Kaille series is really interesting, urban fantasy set in pre-Revolutionary war Boston).
For me, I think it will be a write what comes to mind and pray I don't get so overwhelmed by the edits that I never do them. (always a fear of mine). Also I think it's a terrifying global search ride for me as I try to figure out areas of repetition. I know I use the word 'look' about a billion times (I'm very very visually oriented). Those are opportunities to edit the suck out and put in some showing.
What do you all do to tackle this issue?
and apropos of nothing, I NEED someone to hold my feet to the fire so I finish my damn steampunk novella.
Also check out my post on world building issues here
yearly word count -
That said, I DO do it. I know that. I struggle very much with it. Part of it, I believe has to do with my turning away from description (and all seriousness I can point to the person in a writer's group in the 90's that had a lot to do with it). But even then I'm sure I did this a lot. I also write fast, thinking less about the words than I should which leaves me with deep edits that I need to make but drag my heels about.
Speaking of which, here a scene about fear. He was so afraid of going to jail his feet barely worked. Telling, no doubt.
Here's a scene about the same thing from D.B. Jackson's Thieves' Quarry I thought it worked very well. And yes as he neared the prison, memories of that old cell and his captivity in Barbados flooded his mind like a rising storm tide. War ha never frightened him, even in his youth. He had sailed through ocean storms that would have reduced some grown men to sobbing babes. He had been beaten and threatened; he had come close to dying more times than he could count. None of that scared him. But prison...He found himself choking back tears. His legs trembled as the regulars lead him down the length of Queen Street....Sweat, urine, feces, vomit, fear, desperation, hopelessness. He was drowning in a noisome sea. The men holding him practically had to carry him along the stone corridor, his feet half walking, half dragging. the soldiers' fingers were like iron, gouging the muscles in his arm.
This paints a picture of a man in terror. I could feel Ethan's fear along with him. This is the kind of scene I would like to be able to write and I think that's half the trick. There is a reason Stephen King and other authors all list reading in their top 10 things an author must do. Read. Find styles that speak to you. Try to bring some of that into your own writing.
For me, I'm not sure I will ever slow down and get something like this on the first try but to be fair, I have no idea how many rewrites it took Dr. Jackson to get it like this (D.B. Jackson has a ph.D. in history and his Ethan Kaille series is really interesting, urban fantasy set in pre-Revolutionary war Boston).
For me, I think it will be a write what comes to mind and pray I don't get so overwhelmed by the edits that I never do them. (always a fear of mine). Also I think it's a terrifying global search ride for me as I try to figure out areas of repetition. I know I use the word 'look' about a billion times (I'm very very visually oriented). Those are opportunities to edit the suck out and put in some showing.
What do you all do to tackle this issue?
and apropos of nothing, I NEED someone to hold my feet to the fire so I finish my damn steampunk novella.
Also check out my post on world building issues here
yearly word count -
114746 / 150000
(76.5%)
(76.5%)
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